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timefreeze
Reviewed @ 9:38 a.m. on 2003-07-15
First Impression= [5/5]
I've never seen this layout before.
Layout= [10/30]
There's just something about this layout I don't like. Maybe it's because the picture splits the navigation and the entry. In all honesty, it looks kind of wanky. Maybe it'd be better if you switched the location of the picture and the entry. I just don't like the organization of the layout. It looks strange.
Your archives page, as is usual with a Lissy creation, is a mess. Please make your link size smaller. It's just a jumble or words.
Whoah! Okay, on further investigation, I counted as many as three different templates. PLEASE stick to one. Please, please, please get rid of that sickening red D-land template, and the peachy one whose pictures don't work. The layout you have now is infinitely better than both of those.
Content= [10/20]
I started here and honestly the first thing I thought was, how strange. Aside from using no capitalization, you also have a tendency to ramble quite a bit. Your sentences run on and on and on and quite honestly it's hard to comprehend the line of thought you're trying to get into.
I found it really hard to stay focused on any entry for long. You say the same thing over and over again, in just different ways. For instance, http://timefreeze.diaryland.com/030613_55.html">this. I find the topic interesting, but you didn't break the paragraph once and so it was easy to lose my place.
At least you don't write boring daylog. And when your entries are short enough, I actually kind of relate to what you say. I share your same opinion on gay people and straight people. I just think it would be easier to read you if you inserted some paragraph breaks here and there.
I found this short, sweet, and amusing. You ought to write more entries like this. They're more interesting than the ones that ramble down the page. I also loved your entry of firsts. I just might steal it and plug in my own answers.
All in all, you have some really great entries, but most I found it hard to read because they're so long and filled with run-on sentences.
Where's the link= [5/5]
In your buddy list.
Errors= [2/5]
Having three separate templates definitely hurts you. Please, go fix them so you have the same template on all your entries.
Contact= [2/4]
E-mail, notes.
Organization= [7/10]
Like I said, there's just something about the organization. If you switched the entry and the picture, it'd be better.
Also, the archives page is a jumbled mess. Fix the font size, please.
Updates= [4/10]
Welcome to a sporadic diary. It seems as though you write when you feel like it. While there's nothing wrong with that, I'm just following protocol when I dock you points for writing six entries a month.
Bonus= [2/5]
Cast, surveys.
Will I be coming back?= [1/6]
No, sorry.
What I thought of the diary?
Many things need to be fixed. Some entries are capable of holding attention; others, not so.
Number of entries read= 19
Total: [66/100]
Reviewed by Heather
